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exoticpublishing
05-03-2006, 04:45 PM
My new copywriter is starting w/ the headlines & wants me to pick the one I like the best.

I'd like to hear which 3 you like the best so I can gage people's reactions. :)

Can you pls. give me the corresponding #s starting from the one you like the best to the 3rd best.

Thanks


Michelle
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2. Former Escort Service Executive Reveals Her Secrets

3. Secrets to Running A Successful Escort Service Finally Revealed - Former Escort Service Executive Tells All

4. The Secret Life Of Escort Companies Revealed

5. The One and Only Comprehensive Guide To Starting and Running Your Own Escort Service

6. The Only Guide To Starting and Running Your Own Escort Service You’ll Ever Need

7. Everything You’ll Ever Need To Know To Starting and Running Your Own Escort Service Revealed

8. Everything You’ll Ever Need To Know In Starting and Running Your Own Escort Service Finally Revealed

9. The One Book All Other Escort Services Tried To Kill

10. The Definitive Guide To Owning and Running A Successful Escort Service

11. Leave The Rat Race Behind – How To Start Your Own Exotic Escort Service Revealed

12. Insider Spills All – Exclusive Guide To Starting, Owning and Running Your Own Exotic Escort Service

13. The Most Money You’ll Ever Make With Your Clothes On

KelliShaver
05-03-2006, 05:09 PM
10 (the only one I really care for at all), 11, and 7... Most of them sound entirely too unprofessional for me to get the feeling that I would get sound business advice from them.

jacob
05-04-2006, 02:13 PM
i prefer number 10 myself. the rest i read and feel that im reading spam email subject lines in my inbox.

Peter Hobday
05-05-2006, 03:01 AM
Exotic - I write headlines for a living and they usually derive from the opening paragraph, which is where your Unique Selling Proposition should be explained.

So I don't think your method of chosing a headline is the way to go! Asking an opinion isn't the same as actually selling or getting a response to your letter. What people like or don't like has no bearing on the response.

You have an interesting product and an interesting problem: how to avoid the natural objections to purchase and being dismissed as just another spam type promotion.

If I saw some more of the product, I could come up with an idea.

Peter

Peter Hobday
05-05-2006, 03:12 AM
Exotic - please contact me via email if you wish - I forgot to say.

Peter

ChrisS
05-05-2006, 05:42 PM
10 is the best.

I'd love that course! But would I have to pimp myself out for a while to start?